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    Someone please correct my mistakes.This is my attempt of translating a scene.

    Olimpia : TU ERES MI PRINCIPAL ENEMIGA EN ESTA CASA Y YO QUIERO SABER POR QUE ENTIENDES.

    You are my main enemy in this house and I want to know why. Do you understand me?

    Pandora : ¡SUéLTAME! NO ESTOY DE ACUERDO CON TU FORMA DE PROCEDER, TU NO RESPETAS A NADIE ,TU HUMILLAS, CALUMNIAS, ATROPELLAS, ¿QUIERES QUE TE DIGA MáS?.
    Let go of me!I do not agree with your way of behavior.You don't respect anybody.You humiliate us,slander us,run over us!Do you want me to say more?

    Olimpia : PUES VAS A TENER Q SOPORTARME Y ¿SABES POR QUé?, PORQUE SOY TU MADRE.
    Well, you'll have to put up with me and you know why?Cause I'm your mother!

    Pandora : LAMENTABLEMENTE Y PARA MI DESGRACIA.... A Mí NO ME PONGAS UN DEDO ENCIMA, OLIMPIA.
    Unfortunately and to my dismay!Don't put a finger on me,Olimpia!

    Olimpia : ESTáS LOCA CHICA, ESTás LOCA, NO SABES LO QUE HACES.
    You are crazy, girl.You are mad,you don't know what are you doing!

    Pandora Sí, PUEDE SER, A LO MEJOR ES ALGO QUE HEREDé DE TI. PERO ESE VA SER TU CASTIGO, A LO MEJOR POR éSO ES por lo QUE TE SOPORTO Y NO SALGO CORRIENDO DE ESTA CASA.
    Yes.Probably it's something I inherited from you.But this is going to be your punishment.
    Maybe this is the cause I'm suffering you and I'm not running from this house.


    Olimpia : AY, ¿ SABES QUé, CHICA? QUE ME TIENES HARTA, ME TIENES HARTA, UN DíA DE ESTOS VAS A ACABAR CON MI PACIENCIA ¿QUé ES LO QUE QUIERES?.
    You know what,girl?I've had enough.One of these days you're going to put an end to my patience.What do you want?

    Pandora : QUE ME DIGAS SI NO PIENSAS HACER NADA POR TU HIJO AQUILES, SI EN VERDAD NO TE IMPORTA POR LO QUE ESTá PASANDO.
    Tell me.Aren't you going to do anything about your son, Aquiles? You really don't care for what's hapenning to him?

    Olimpia : NO ME IMPORTA EN LO MAS MíNIMO, éL ESCOGIó UNA VIDA CON LA QUE NO ESTOY DE ACUERDO, ENTONCES QUE SE LAS ARREGLE SóLO.
    I don't care the least.He chose a life which I don't agree at all, so he's gonna fix it alone.


    Pandora : ERES PEOR DE LO QUE PENSABA OLIMPIA. ALGúN DíA VAS A PAGAR POR HABER hUNDIDO A TUS HIJOS.
    You are worse than I thought, Olimpia. Someday, you'll pay for destroying your children.

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    Default Re: Please check if this is correct

    Hi Backstreet

    Highly charged dialog here!

    To me it looks as a pretty good translation. Just a couple of suggestions: "atropellas", I'd use something like "push us around", because "run over" is most of the time related to traffic incidents. And at one point you translate "soportarme" as "put up with me", but later as "suffering". I think that "put up" is better.

    Hope it helps.

    Cheers.
    P.

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