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    Hello, i wrote this but i'm not sure about some words. Can somebody revise it ?

    Road Rage is a form of anger and happens while people are driving. Road Rage may be harmful not only to you but others, as well. The first example of road rage is being impatient. For example, two months ago, my best friend and I were driving around our college and another car was pushing us to go faster. We did not do it, so he or she passed us and put on front of my car. Second example is aggressive behavior. This is often seen when people cannot control their emotions and PUT all their frustration with other drivers. For instance, a friend of mine told me that she was the other day picking up her children from school, and her car was not working well. Her car broke down in the middle of the street, and there was this driver that instead of help her, started yield on her. Finally, two other drivers helped her to move her car away the traffic. Last but not least, the most dangerous example of Road Rage is when people use their car against others. For example, tailgating, flashing lights, blasting your horn, cutting other off are common actions of road ragers. To summarize, Road Rage is a very dangerous behavior, and it cannot be tolerated under any circumstance.

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    Hi There
    Im not sure what you are asking. This part of the forum is Eng into Spanish, and your paragraph is in English. Do you have a source text from which you translated it? Or did you write it in English directly?
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    Road Rage [Road rage] is a form of anger and happens [it takes place when] while people are driving. Road Rage [Road rage] may be harmful not only to you but [to] others as well. The first example [cause]of road rage is being impatient. For example, two months ago, my best friend and I were driving around our college and another car was pushing us to go faster. We did not do it, so he or she passed us and put on front [got in front of] my car. Second example [Another cause]is aggressive behavior. This is often seen when people cannot control their emotions and PUT [take out ] all their frustration with other drivers. For instance, a friend of mine told me that she was the other day picking up her children from school [the other day], and her car was not working well. Her car broke down in the middle of the street, and [a passing-by driver started yelling at her instead of helping her.] there was this driver that instead of help her, started yield on her. Finally, [At the end,] two other drivers [people] helped her to move her car away [from] the traffic. Last but not least, the most dangerous example [cause] of Road Rage [road rage] is when people use their car [as a weapon-like?] against others. For example, tailgating, flashing lights, blasting your [their] horn, cutting other[s] off are common actions of road ragers [road ragers]. To summarize, Road Rage [Road rage] is a very dangerous behavior, and it cannot [should not] be tolerated under any circumstance.

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    Cotty .. you are the best. That was what i needed. I preciate it. Thanks.

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    Quote Originally Posted by kattycabrera View Post
    Cotty .. you are the best. That was what i needed. I preciate it. Thanks.
    taking [their] frustrations OUT ON other drivers...

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