Rendition Thesis: Needs Reviewing

Hi, my name is Facundo Hernández and I'm from La Plata, Argentina. I'm finishing my translation studies, and I need help with my Rendition Thesis. The work is finished, but my professor insisted on getting it reviewed by an American, since I chose to localized the text. If an American colleague could read my thesis and mark my errors throughout the text, it will be amazing! This is the last step towards getting my degree. I don't need translation marks, just to see if my English sounds natural and American (dates, spelling, punctutation marks, everything).
The text is fun and is not that long. It is about a model for having a successful business, and it is full of graphs and interesting case studies. Who said "me"? :)