Lindsey

You think I need any corrections? The parts I'm unsure about I'll mark in red...

PARTIRÁS
(Letra: Pedro Ruíz Céspedes / Miguel Gallardo)

Las flores no tienen precio, ni hay autobuses al sol
Flowers don't have a price, nor are there buses to the sun
y no me asusta el desprecio, de una niña de charol
and the disdain of a gіrl of leather doesn't frighten me
Y si no me entiende nadie, ni me quieres de verdad
And if no one understands me, nor you really love me
me casaré con el aire, y moriré en soledad
I will marry the air and die in loneliness
Y si no tengo la suerte, de encontrar a mi mitad
And if I am not lucky enough to find my [better] half
le seré fiel a la muerte, que en ella habré de parar
I will be faithful to death, in it I will have to stop [looking?]
Partirás, partirás
You will split, you will split
a tu mundo, a tu ciudad
your world, your city
partirás, partirás
You will split, you will split
Porque me gusta ser libre, y entregarme sin dudar
Because I like being frее, and surrendering(?) without doubt
soy demasiado sensible, para dejarme engañar
I am too sensitive to let myself be fooled

SandraT

Just made a few changes. Hope it helps.

and that's how I will end
or
and in death I shall end

You will leave

to your world, to your city

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[Have a nice day!!!
♥ Sandra T ♥

Pablohz

[quote=Lindsey]You think I need any corrections? The parts I'm unsure about I'll mark in red...

habré de parar...parar de hacer algo??? o vivir????
(exept for what sandrat pointed out)....is ok...but ......translate poetry or songs is VERY difficult, because you have to choose btw, form and rhyme for example, what's more important...what the writer said or how he said it???.....and most of times is a combination of both....in this case it is not that difficult, but for example...what if split is a metaphor.....a personal experience???....etc....
you should investigate more about the writers...or ask them if you can...that would give you a better clue...
CHAVELA......