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LauraAna · 12-16-2007, 08:08 PM

Hello all!

I am trying to translate the song Será by Sin Bandera. I understand the song completely in Spanish, but I'm trying to translate it for someone that speaks absolutely no Spanish and want to maintain both accuracy as well as some of its poetic beauty.

So I have the original Spanish as well as my English translation below. If anyone has suggestions on how to make it more accurate or more poetic I would REALLY appreciate it!!

Thank you so much!!!

Y me quedé soñando, con la ilusión a cuestas,
I kept on dreaming, carrying around illusions
Con la esperanza guardada,
With my hope kept
en el bolsillo roto de un pantalón,
In a broken pants’ pocket
en el baúl sin fondo de mis decepciones
In an unending chest of deceptions

Aletargado en el tiempo obsesionado con verte
Weary from time spent obsessing over seeing you
Se enrojecieron mis ojos se marchitaba mi mente
My eyes reddened, my mind faded
(I think it sounds better to say “My eyes reddening, my mind fading” but
that doesn’t necessarily follow the tense used in Spanish…)

Será, que aún no se llenaba la luna
It could be, that the moon wasn’t full
Será, que el tiempo fue menguando nuestras ganas
It could be, that time diminished our desires
Será, será, será, será la luna
It could be, it could be, it could be, it could be the moon
Será, será, será, serán las ganas, será...
It could be, it could be, it could be, it could be our desires, it could be...

Y me quedé en suspenso, con una historia breve,
I was left in suspense, with a brief history
en los niveles más bajos de mis latidos del corazón
In the lowest levels of the beatings of my heart
entre lo inverosímil de mis frustraciones
Among the improbabilities of my frustrations

viva madrid · 12-17-2007, 10:06 AM

I've made a few suggestions below. Beautiful lyrics!

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Originally Posted by LauraAna

Hello all!

I am trying to translate the song Ser� by Sin Bandera. I understand the song completely in Spanish, but I'm trying to translate it for someone that speaks absolutely no Spanish and want to maintain both accuracy as well as some of its poetic beauty.

So I have the original Spanish as well as my English translation below. If anyone has suggestions on how to make it more accurate or more poetic I would REALLY appreciate it!!

Thank you so much!!!

Y me qued� so�ando, con la ilusi�n a cuestas,
I kept on dreaming, carrying around illusions
Con la esperanza guardada,
With my hope kept
en el bolsillo roto de un pantal�n,
In a broken(RIPPED) pants� pocket
en el ba�l sin fondo de mis decepciones
In an unending chest(BOTTOMLESS TRUNK) of deceptions

Aletargado en el tiempo obsesionado con verte
Weary from time spent obsessing over seeing you
Se enrojecieron mis ojos se marchitaba mi mente
My eyes reddened, my mind faded
(I think it sounds better to say �My eyes reddening, my mind fading� but
that doesn�t necessarily follow the tense used in Spanish�)

Ser�, que a�n no se llenaba la luna
It could be, that the moon wasn�t full (YET)
Ser�, que el tiempo fue menguando nuestras ganas
It could be, that time diminished our desires
Ser�, ser�, ser�, ser� la luna
It could be, it could be, it could be, it could be the moon
Ser�, ser�, ser�, ser�n las ganas, ser�...
It could be, it could be, it could be, it could be our desires, it could be...

Y me qued� en suspenso, con una historia breve,
I was left in suspense, with a brief history
en los niveles m�s bajos de mis latidos del coraz�n
In the lowest levels of the beatings of my heart
entre lo inveros�mil de mis frustraciones
Among the improbabilities of my frustrations

SandraT · 12-17-2007, 11:28 AM

Hi Lauraana! I don't think you have to translate exactly into Spanish. I would rather use
"Perhaps" instead of "it could be". It does not change the meaning but also it is a lot more English and romantic. Don't you think?

Perhaps, the moon was not full
perhaps....

I also wanted to say that the first time I heard this song was by Ricardo Montaner, long ago, around the end of the 80's or so.

LauraAna · 12-17-2007, 04:57 PM

Thanks so much to both of you!!

I agree that "perhaps" does sound better... especially since it is repeated so many times in the chorus!! Much better to just have one word.

And I also agree that the lyrics are beautiful...

Thanks again!

12-16-2007, 08:08 PM	#1
LauraAna Registered User Join Date: Oct 2007 Posts: 11 Rep Power: 11	Sera - Sin Bandera Hello all! I am trying to translate the song Será by Sin Bandera. I understand the song completely in Spanish, but I'm trying to translate it for someone that speaks absolutely no Spanish and want to maintain both accuracy as well as some of its poetic beauty. So I have the original Spanish as well as my English translation below. If anyone has suggestions on how to make it more accurate or more poetic I would REALLY appreciate it!! Thank you so much!!! Y me quedé soñando, con la ilusión a cuestas, I kept on dreaming, carrying around illusions Con la esperanza guardada, With my hope kept en el bolsillo roto de un pantalón, In a broken pants’ pocket en el baúl sin fondo de mis decepciones In an unending chest of deceptions Aletargado en el tiempo obsesionado con verte Weary from time spent obsessing over seeing you Se enrojecieron mis ojos se marchitaba mi mente My eyes reddened, my mind faded (I think it sounds better to say “My eyes reddening, my mind fading” but that doesn’t necessarily follow the tense used in Spanish…) Será, que aún no se llenaba la luna It could be, that the moon wasn’t full Será, que el tiempo fue menguando nuestras ganas It could be, that time diminished our desires Será, será, será, será la luna It could be, it could be, it could be, it could be the moon Será, será, será, serán las ganas, será... It could be, it could be, it could be, it could be our desires, it could be... Y me quedé en suspenso, con una historia breve, I was left in suspense, with a brief history en los niveles más bajos de mis latidos del corazón In the lowest levels of the beatings of my heart entre lo inverosímil de mis frustraciones Among the improbabilities of my frustrations Last edited by LauraAna : 12-16-2007 at 10:10 PM.

12-17-2007, 11:28 AM	#3
SandraT Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Havana,Cuba Posts: 586 Rep Power: 482	Hi Lauraana! I don't think you have to translate exactly into Spanish. I would rather use "Perhaps" instead of "it could be". It does not change the meaning but also it is a lot more English and romantic. Don't you think? Perhaps, the moon was not full perhaps.... I also wanted to say that the first time I heard this song was by Ricardo Montaner, long ago, around the end of the 80's or so. __________________ _____________________________ [Have a nice day!!! ♥ Sandra T ♥

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12-17-2007, 04:57 PM	#4
LauraAna Registered User Join Date: Oct 2007 Posts: 11 Rep Power: 11	Thanks so much to both of you!! I agree that "perhaps" does sound better... especially since it is repeated so many times in the chorus!! Much better to just have one word. And I also agree that the lyrics are beautiful... Thanks again!

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