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    Smile Translation of my poem to spanish :)

    Hi, I'd really appreciate it if someone could translate
    my poem to spanish . The poem is not very long and
    I understand that there has to be some changes, so that
    the poem makes sense.

    Here it is:

    If I settle for less, I'd have to give up;
    All directions, seasons and days of the week
    And smiles that overlay pains and heartaches
    Jokes and laughs, that get rid of all loneliness
    Let go of warmth, sunshine and summerbreeze
    Leave the ocean, earth, moon and stars alone
    Abandon all hidden dreams and hopes for life
    I'd have to settle for someone else, not you

    Thanks a lot !

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    I'm going to give it a try

    If I settle for less, I'd have to give up;
    All directions, seasons and days of the week
    And smiles that overlay pains and heartaches
    Jokes and laughs, that get rid of all loneliness
    Si me conformara con menos, tendría que renunciar
    a las direcciones, estaciones y días de la semanas
    y a las sonrisas que enmascaran los dolores y las penas
    las bromas y las risas que alejan las soledades.

    Let go of warmth, sunshine and summerbreeze
    Leave the ocean, earth, moon and stars alone
    Abandon all hidden dreams and hopes for life
    I'd have to settle for someone else, not you
    renunciar al calor, al sol y a la brisa
    dejar atrás el mar, la tierra, la luna y las estrellas
    abandonar todos los sueños escondidos y esperanzas de vida
    Tendría que conformarme con otro(a), no contigo.

    It's not a literal translation, of course. Poems are always a challenge!
    Very nice one, by the way!
    Last edited by SandraT; 04-07-2009 at 04:00 PM.
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    Default Re: Translation of my poem to spanish :)

    Sandra,
    All directions, seasons and days

    Yo pondría en vez de direcciones, a todos los caminos,

    otra cosa que se me ocurre es angustias en vez de dolores

    Que te parece Sandra?

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    Default Re: Translation of my poem to spanish :)

    Diego, me gustan tus cambios.

    Quizás también para el final:

    Tendría que conformarme con otro, que no fueras tú.

    Muy bonito, Sandra, conserva perfectamente el sabor poético.
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    Hola, buenos días. Me gustan sus sugerencias, chicos. Son perfectas.

    Carolinkaa, diegonoel and exxecentrica have made good suggestions. It sounds a lot better that way. Good luck with your poem!
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    Mis felicitaciones a Diego, a Exx y en especial a ti Sandrita. Tu traducción tiene mucha inspiración. No es facil traducir poemas, pero tu le diste un toque muy artísico

    Best regards


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    Default Re: Translation of my poem to spanish :)

    Sandra, I doubt anybody else would have done it better. Just some suggestions, perhaps to keep the poetical tone in Spanish.


    Si hubiera de conformarme con menos, tendría que renunciar
    a las direcciones, estaciones y días de la semana,
    a las sonrisas que enmascaran los dolores y las penas,
    a las bromas y las risas que alejan las soledades.
    renunciar al calor, al sol y a la brisa
    dejar atrás el mar, la tierra, la luna y las estrellas
    abandonar todos los sueños escondidos y las esperanzas.
    Tendría que conformarme con alguien más, no contigo.

    As you said, poems are always a challenge, but this one you apparently tackled with no difficulty whatsoever, and the result was a very beautiful poem in Spanish. Great work indeed!

    Saludos




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    I love team work! It could not have been perfect without all of your suggestions. Carolinkaa must be very happy with the result.
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