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Originally Posted by vicente
Eliminate the word "the" from Attorney.
Substitute "was" for got and "to" for in.
Either place a comma after year of capitalize Having
My offer:
In the City of Asuncion, Republic of Paraguay, on the 4th day of MAY of 2009, Attorney NAME, General Secretary of the Universidad Americana (American University) Certifies that:
Mister NAME, I.D. NUMBER and RUA (Student Record Number) NUMBER was admitted to this academic institution in the year YEAR , having successfully completed the required course of study in the field of COMPUTER SCIENCE ENGINEERING and as recorded in our files, his grades are as expressed below: |
Did you leave
was in your offer on purpose or just by mistake? You first suggestion was to change it to
got.
It really sounds more fluent now. Do you think a comma after "
and, as recorded in our files, his grades are as expressed below:" is necessary as well to make it clearer?
Mauricio.-